For the beginners, deciding the thesis statement and topic sentences sometimes is very difficult. Moreover, they can not focus the thesis or the topic ones on, so the ambiguity is the result. Here, some instances of the mistakes will be deserved:
1. I agree with you about the bad impacts of using computer everyday when people begin to work until the end. This problem is very important things discussed because of lots of reasons.
Analyses:
This introduction is not good because of no topic in explanation.
2. In my opinion, I disagree with you that computers have good and bad impacts.
Analyses:
This introduction is not excellent although several of the beginning phrases are interesting enough. It is true that the computer has two sides that are good and bad. However, the topic states ambiguity because of the explanation on which the speaker focuses.
3. In my view, I take the opposition of computer's bad impacts. Also, Internet has the bad impacts as well.
Analyses:
The thesis statement is good. But, the introduction also covers Internet regarding as the new thesis statement. Consequently, it brings two thesis statement that the ambiguity comes.
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